Numb

Category: Writers Block

Post 1 by midnight sun (you can't catch me, i'm the palobread man) on Monday, 08-Dec-2008 0:04:04

Covered by thick walls of darkness that keep all feelings away.
Please don't break through, this is where I want to stay.
Cause numbness is my safe place, my salvation.
It protects me, shutting out every sensation.
Let it be dark, let it be night.
I am not ready to see the light.
Don't let this numbness ever go away.
Please stay with me darkness, I can't face the day.

Post 2 by Elenhiia (Feather'rr'rr'rr'rr'rr'rr'rr'rr'rr'rr for president!) on Monday, 08-Dec-2008 0:40:00

It's... haunting. You write simply but you have the power of laying bare and clear exactly what the poem means. You remind me of someone I knew sometimes in that aspect.

Post 3 by SEPTEMBER-TWILIGHT (CAN I TALK? PLEASE?) on Monday, 08-Dec-2008 6:36:01

Lory, that's reallly ... sad. And I really like your writing style, it's not complex like most writers. It's really simple, and yet, it's powerful at the same time

Post 4 by SEPTEMBER-TWILIGHT (CAN I TALK? PLEASE?) on Monday, 08-Dec-2008 6:36:02

Lory, that's reallly ... sad. And I really like your writing style, it's not complex like most writers. It's really simple, and yet, it's powerful at the same time

Post 5 by Thunderstorm (HotIndian!) on Monday, 08-Dec-2008 7:14:57

numbness?

do you say this is what you wanted? if you say yes, which means you're lying.

if you're sure of your decision that you want to be in dark, you don't wana see the brightness, you want to be in between the four walls, you won't be logging into this site. you won't be talking to anyone. you won't be talking even with your stella, you see.

as per my opinion, this could never be happened. I can say I want peace I love silence. I love to hear the wind's blowing. I wana hear sound of the waves without any intereption. I love to learn the language of flowers and plants.

Raaj.

Post 6 by PorkInCider (Wind assisted.) on Monday, 08-Dec-2008 17:48:06

Lory, it's sad, and beautiful, and will be ok, one day.

Post 7 by Gracesong (Zone BBS is my Life) on Monday, 08-Dec-2008 18:33:41

Hey Lory,
I agree with Iyana that your poetry is powerful, yet simple.
Hang in there, and keep writing!
Iris

Post 8 by sweetcakes (Newborn Zoner) on Saturday, 13-Dec-2008 0:01:22

I think it's a beautiful piece and quite sincere from his point of view. Sounds to me he's looking to "tune out" and it shows in his writing. What a shame.

Post 9 by Maiden of the Moonlight (Zone BBS is my Life) on Saturday, 13-Dec-2008 19:31:25

Oh wow, Lory, I love it. You're very tallented, and I feel exactly what you are trying to say.

Post 10 by Striker (Consider your self warned, i'm creative and offensive like handicap porn.) on Saturday, 13-Dec-2008 20:21:23

lory, verry nicely done, see, you really doo write well.
Simple yet verry deep from the heart, nice. You remind me a little of me sometimes

Post 11 by Miss Gorgeous (I'm going for the prolific poster awards!) on Friday, 19-Dec-2008 22:17:47

Hey, you did a great job with your poem. Your title followed each line consistently. Well done good job.